When I typed this, by the dialogue I meant typos and grammar mistakes, but now that I've loaded the game and read the opening dialogue again I realize that it was purposefully done for Odin. I didn't realize that the first time, sorry! I think the rough speaking style paired with the "?!" left a messy impression on my mind. This is extremely nitpicky but I don't know if "!?" would be better or if it would just like neater with a simple "?" Line breaks after sentences and a bit wider text box to fit it all might help things look cleaner too.
Now that you mention it, the writing does feel pretty unnatural. For some reason I'm really hung up on Loki's use of "cannot" instead of "can't." This has devolved into excessive nitpicky-ness though. Just in general, if you spend more time on the game I would suggest revisiting the dialogue scenes. Sorry for the confusion!