So far, I really like the game Killer7. But figured I'd give my criticisms to help make the game better.
1) I know that renders and the animation and stuff is really time consuming and such, but perhaps some different positions when they have sex? There's basically 4 different positions and that's all they do. The same for sleeping positions, they're all in the exact same pose.
2) The grammar is pretty.. Tough. For the most part, it's easily understandable but there's quite a bit that can be polished up.
3) The timing of stuff. Everything is extremely sped up it seems. Contains spoilers here *************SPOILER************ Like when Sandra gets pregnant. He's been there just 2 months, and she's already had her period twice and already was going on her third time, and then already pregnant before the third one. Not to mention it takes more than a few days to start getting pregnant and then miss your period. Usually a pregnancy test won't even pick up on possible pregnancy unless she's been pregnant for about 6-7 days already. And they literally just started trying like 3 days ago in the game.
4) There's a few places in the game where the text doesn't match up (it seemed like) or perhaps the dialogue was messed up and could use some more commas. Like one part it seemed like MC and one of the FMCs were talking about MC's father or something, and they used MC's name to refer to the father.
That is because this is just a story! I keep forgetting that myself, too. It's not supposed to be a real life documentary. Though, the part about it being incest is totally false. I mean, they are all STEP sisters, or cousins, etc. The only true blood relation he has is with Becca (his Landlady/Mother.) Hell, if it was they would cause all sorts of problems! Anyway, as you have only started playing, I would say carry on with it. BTW, did you get the patch that changed it from Landlay, tenant etc. to the proper titles? It makes the game so much better! As I am not a girl, I do not know about how periods work, so I guess I will have to agree with you on that one! Hope it was ok to reply! Killer7 VERY rarely does!
Yeah, I got the patch that has the proper titles. While I don't really care if it's incest or not, I've never been a fan of the whole "tenant/landlord" thing. Just really breaks the story for me. And haha, nah man. They're half-siblings. They are blood related. Step-siblings are only related by marriage, so no blood connection, where half-siblings have one of the same parents. In this case, for Sandra and Lucy, it's through Becca, and for Alice, it's through the MC's father. So they are all officially blood related, so it's very much true incest lol. None of the step-sibling porn that people make lol.
Yeah, I understand it's a story. Just breaks that immersion though when timelines are a bit condensed. And yeah, periods are a bit tricky. Usually every 3-4 weeks is when it starts up again. So it's not always exactly 4 weeks before it happens again on the dot, but periods are usually pretty regular unless something happens. So it's pretty crazy when Sandra is having a period like every 2 to 2.5 weeks lol
Yeah, the whole tenant/landlord thing threw me for a loop. I was always told that true blood relations are only kids who have the same mother and father. So, if a mother has sex with 2 different father then the kids are not blood related. Oh well, you learn something new every day, and, thinking about it I guess it makes sense. I am not really bothered by the whole incest thing, either. Well, I may be in real life but I doubt it! I am a pretty laid back guy. Like my favourite VN's are true lesbian titles with no men in the story whatsoever. But they are pretty hard to come by. Well, in the "realistic looking character" form, anyway. The cartoony ones are quite plentiful. My favourite ones are Kindred Spirits - On The Roof, (quite expensive and long, but worth it for me,)and two free ones, First Snow and I can't Believe The Most Popular Girl In School Is A Lesbian Just Like Me (which is a gorgeous story!) just like First Snow is too! And, yes, you are right about the immersion. Again, it was with the tenant/landlord bit with me. Thank you for the reply.
I think if you check out the discord you would see that the grammar is fine for the most part. It's just how I word things and my proofreader keeps that in, there is no reason to nitpick about that since I'm not a native english speaker :P.
And the pacing is not really sped up. Ingame weeks are six days instead of seven and the Pregnancy with Sandra already started during the vacation - That's when she said she will stop taking the pill. So, about 3 ( ingame ) weeks later, she doesn't get her period when she is supposed to and makes pregnancy tests. It all matches up if you read everything carefully ;).
Haha, sorry. I wasn't trying to be insulting or anything. English was one of my majors during my university days. It's one of those things that I always notice. Plus the whole "anything can be better" mentality that I have. I agree though, the grammar is definitely fine for the most part, but it's my lizard brain saying "but it can still be improved." I really enjoy the game though! For not being finished, it's actually still really long, haha. Also, I actually didn't know you weren't a native English speaker!
Ah, that makes a little more sense with weeks being six days versus seven. I wasn't really confused about the timing of her pregnancy, really. It was more that it seemed she was having more periods for a month and a half or two months worth of time than would seem normal. Though, women are all different so I don't really know lol. I still really enjoy the game.