Played this yesterday with my younger brother who's in middle school. I'm someone who plays all types of games and especially love ones in this style so I enjoyed it a lot and hold a lot of love for Mallory's character. On the other hand, my brother is more of an action kind of guy but to my surprise, he also enjoyed the game a lot.
The only thing he said was that there was too much dialogue at the end but he's young and doesn't care much for plot right now so I'm not surprised. I personally love where this story is heading. I'm not sure if you're looking for feedback or not but I would like to add that I also loved the puzzles and would love to see more puzzle-like aspects incorporated into the game. Can't wait to play the final result!