Thanks Alehazar, glad we've found an audience in you!
There's plenty more mistakes in there I'm sure! Having to rush to produce each chapter in a timely fashion leaves little time for error checking - and that past-present tense thing has been a huge bugbear of mine. We also switched the tenses somewhere in the 3rd day and it's now inconsistent.
The good news though, is that we've got a version of the script kindly fixed by the community - I'll be implementing that in the next chapter, but I'm sure there will still be errors here and there. Thanks so much for your offer, please don't hesitate to drop a private message with any other errors you spot!