Ahh! I loved this, and I'm really looking forward to seeing where it goes now!
The art is amazing, I really like the aesthetic, and the characters are all so beautiful. Also I feel like it does a really good job of including enough CG stuff to give impact to scenes that deserve it, and in visually interesting and varied ways too.
The story is really good too. It does a good job of balancing the realistic aspects of the story with the supernatural. Honestly the egg hatching scene in the first chapter could stand on its own as a really solid short romance VN.
And I kind of enjoyed that it's really not shy about its influences. It feels like the explicitly queer version of all those anime/games that we deserve!
Also, I played this right after the demo, and I was impressed by how much it was improved, it fixed pretty much everything I was unsure about the first time through. (Depending on how much effort it would take, it might be worth backporting into the demo release.)
One minor point I noticed: At a certain point everyone just starts using she/her for Kite, which felt right, but it also seemed a little odd that it was never discussed (unless I missed something) given they were so explicit about that earlier.
Hey! This is such a lovely and honestly thorough comment, so first of all thank you so much! I appreciate your insight and oh my gosh your enthusiasm!
It's definitely on my to-do list to re-port the demo, I don't think it'd be too tough for me to do? I'll tinker with it during my downtime before I work on the next update for sure. Thank you for mentioning it too - the more ppl who do the more incentive I'll have to get off my butt and do it lol.
That's a good point about the pronoun changes, I don't think it's just you or that you missed something. I make tweaks, changes, and cuts to the script ALL the time lmao so I'm not surprised if I cut a scene down here and there and didn't notice that I removed context for the pronoun change. Plus I re-shuffle conversations around too. If memory serves Kite has a convo with Balsam about it before the mission, but I might have wanted to make the change earlier in this version of the script and messed up that continuity somewhere. It's worth making a second pass and updating the script - it's totally like, a major plot point that would be worth getting just right.