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Hello!!
Indeed, english is not my first language (and not second one either), and I sensibly realize that in addition to the fact that I often have banal typos and difficulties with the selection of words and exact expressions I can also make mistakes even in the very construction of a sentence and their logical chain as a whole, relying on my personal feelings and sense of shades of the language, and not on how it should actually work, so thank you very much for the review - I will try to be more attentive in the future;) 

I am also aware that my writing style (the stream of consciousness to a greater extent), in some places includes very confusing, long and too saturated with epithets and phrases of sentences, which in themselves can be difficult to comprehend without the necessary immersion and addiction to the tones. For example, the prologue itself is very rich in artistic techniques and a complex storytelling style - I really hoped that this would help to delve into the fantasy and gloom of the story, make you feel and get an impression of it as a legend in a forgotten language, or a medieval ballad. 

Thus, for example, the situation with "and" - this technique is called anaphora, lexical repetition, and I often deliberately use it when I try to add a sense of cyclicality to a sentence so that speech seems lively and mobile, with an enhanced impression and preparation, and not flat and gray, with a linear movement of thought and speech. 

Sometimes repetitive words help to separate a long sentence, like a breath of air, sometimes - as I said, to add a sense of flow, cyclicality, to enhance the finished effect. Sometimes these aspects are successful and help the story to unfold in bright and unusual colors, and sometimes they are not, in which case I need to rethink them in order to make the speech more accessible and accurate in terms of expression and narrative line.

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