Hi Danielle,
Played your game for a while now:) Few aspects you might want to consider: Regarding the design, the faded background might be great sometimes - really loved the piano scene for example, but I think that with people you should consider a different method to make them more concise and relatable. Regarding the actual text, you might want to separate the longer paragraphs to several windows, those are harder to follow. Also maybe allow some keyboard interaction? for example press enter to continue to the next paragraph? Anyway I had a lot of fun playing your game, thanks for sharing!
Hope this review was helpful:)
Shifful Studio