Haha! Felt like I was reading a children's book written by Deadpool (weird, right?) :D
Some feedback:
- I believed you used Twine, correct? I don't really know if Twine has that feature, but at times, when I clicked, I didn't notice that text had expanded below the current on-screen text. But that's a minor thing.
- The sound effects were fine at some places, but not at other ones :( It took me out of the experience, as I would rather read visual-novels and text-based adventures than listen :)
You went for a story on a (literal) epic scale! Good job! :)