This game has a lot of potential. The method you are using for story telling and character building is very good. If you were able to put more time into it and had a lot more testing you would be able to polish out all the things getting in the way of making this a great game. Playtest this with anyone you can find to get more feedback than I can give right now if you plan on continuing development. I really want to see this made into something. (From one of the participants of SummerPixelJam, shame you coulldn't make it in time)