I feel like this is a good start even if some of it is lacking.
The biggest asset are the visuals. The art is quite good even though it clearly lacks some expressions for now, all those that are there currently are very well made. The unique BGs, although not matching too well with the character sprites, give off a dreamy vibe that helps with the project's uniqueness. Real kudos to the artist.
Unfortunately, the shoddiest part is the writing. It's amateurish at best and just overall unengaging. The amount of typos and lack of understanding of English writing really damper it further. The interactions are too direct so far, everything way "to the point."
Overall, this VN has potential, but attention, as it is, should go to the writing and editing.