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Great job! The music, artwork, and story were all really good! I hadn't gone through all of the choices, but explored all of the choices in the "sneak in" route. The story is really good! If you were to continue working on this (which I would be interested in seeing more of!) I would suggest having the branching paths lead to different outcomes and have their own branching paths, if possible. Also, there are a couple of grammatical errors sprinkled throughout, but the story still makes sense and is enjoyable! Great artwork, music, and story! The characters seem interesting! Also, I would suggest having some of the branching paths have outcomes that negatively affect the characters, or a couple outcomes where the guards catch on to the protagonists. That said, this is very impressive and the fact that you came up with this story in 48 hours, along with the music, art, and the coding to provide the choices is really impressive! Great job!

Hi, I appreciate the feedback. I would suggest not to take any other route yet before I applied any updates to the story (in the future if I'm not lazy, lol)! I have some plans for future updates, more branching, and multiple endings! About the grammar, sadly I have to look for someone to proofread it since Engrishes es nut mah fes languaje :P Thank you for playing.

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Ah gotcha, I shall avoid doing that then lol. As far as the English goes, you did very well! The reader can still understand what is being said, so don't beat yourself up over it! Your English is very good! (Better than some native-English speakers lol!) It is just fine tuning at this point.