If this were any other week, in any other context, I'd be giving this game a 5. The art is really good, the use of pre-existing audio actually worked well I feel, and the story is some good visual novel fun. You did some great work here, especially for 48 hours, and I don't want to detract from that.

...But the GMTK jam can't be just about aesthetics and story to me. Game design is in the DNA of the contest, and in that regard it's just a normal visual novel. There isn't an exploration of the concept of being stuck together, the idea of cyborgs isn't explored through interactions that let the player engage with it, and when I decided to split up the party it had a likely better outcome than if I didn't. The actual interactions manifested as "pick whichever choice seems interesting or right to me and see what happens," which would be fine if this was a visual novel jam or one focused on story, but I just can't give it full marks here.

It's the first time I play a fully narrative game and although it's not a kind of game I really like, I played the game to the end and I liked it. I like a lot how you managed to put a mood with very simple graphics, and well crafted narrative. I think the choices given to the player could have been more meaningful, I felt every time I had a choice to make it did not have any impact on the flow of the game.  But other than the game is really well made, the story is interesting and well written, good job !

I like the concept and the aesthetics of the game, but moreover, the storyline is solid. The music is a little off, but I changed the volume and continued as I don't want to get distracted by the music. All of these in 48 hrs, when we say 48hrs we know it's minus the sleep so it's commendable how you managed to get all these done in the available time. I want to know what happens next, what happens when Sarif faces Sofea with her memory erased, it's gonna be an emotional moment. All in all, a solid entry! Good job!

Hah, that story was pretty fun. I loved the advanced slingshot and the amazing server room. Really great stuff, and a pretty drawn out vnovel for a gamejam. Great work! ♥

Really cool art style and great plot! The UI is simple and effective. I don't really know what to critique since story is not my forte, but I guess the music could be made to fit the situation more and be generally more tense. But none of that matters because of the amazing server room.

Super unique artstyle for a well-developed story that kept me hooked throughout. Each character feels real with their own backstory, motivations, and flaws. I enjoyed making decisions although they didn't feel super consequential. Also, the UI is very clean and easy-to-use, which allowed me to be fully immersed in the narrative while playing. I'd love to see what happens next in a sequel!

Nice aesthetic! The server room is indeed amazing.

Haven't played many visual novels but I enjoyed this one. I like that the characters have their stories and motivation for their actions, and the story isn't cliche.

I'd like to ask for multiple endings (or have I missed something?) and some kind of more elaborate back story for Frye but it's 48 hour game jam, and that would be a lot of work. Amazing job!

P. S. I like that cliffhanger-ish thing you did at the end, leaves some room for sequels/updates.

Even though I am not much into visual novels or narrative games, I enjoyed this one!

Seeing a visual novel in a jam is definitely rare but I had fun playing it!

The only suggestion I have is to change the background music as it does not fit well with the story, you can even have different music tracks for different parts of the story

Overall an interesting entry to the jam! Great job!

Wow! lots of effort has been put into the art and with a long narrative to go with it, well done! The music is nice but it's a bit too chill for the tension during the narrative but works fairly well for the introduction! The story is quite good too, with all the world building along with characters that have back stories and motives in such a short game! Well done, keep up the good work!

Fantastic game! I love the art and it's style, obviously some of it was rushed but it just adds to the charm. Now the story is something that I really like, the adverse effects of technology on humanity and how it might reduce us to nothing more than machines. I didn't get to experience the full story, but I'm sure it's well executed. Good job on crafting a good story in 48 hours! I'll let it slide that the game fits the theme quite loosely :)

I usually make visual novels for jams, so I love whenever I stumble upon a fellow ren'py dev (although this time my team went with unity and I had to use fungus :D). 

I love your stylistic choice for your art. This way you were able to fit the necessary amount of graphics into your project without losing too much time, which is always a headache with VNs in these tiny time frames. And the best part is that they still look great!

With the worldbuilding you've already done for this, you could very well go for a full length visual novel if you want to continue this! The story so far is a solid foundation that I'm sure you could easily build upon :)

Great work!

Ok so I played your game, and I am impressed, it has a full save system and everything. (The save system overlays some of the buttons, but for 48 hours it's still pretty good.)

I liked how the choices changed the story, and how they felt meaningful even if on subsequent playthroughs they weren't. It's a pretty good narrative game for the time constraint!

I'm not entirely sure how to give feedback on the core of the game, because the core is the story here, and I'm not particularly good at that aspect of design. The one actual game play comment I would leave, is that the text can sometimes overlay over the art and cover relevant information

Also, (and this has little to do with your game as a whole, just your game as a jam entry) your game could have used more thematically to do with joining together. The concept does, but the theme could have been interwoven with the story in a more obvious way.