What a wonderful story and a really clever use of theme. Loved discovering the apartment, and also loved the clever use of hints for when I became stuck. It was a great story too, about moving on in life, that I think could be amplified more if you were making amends.
My feedback would be about presentation. Obviously, it's a text adventure, but there are few things you can do within that. For one, the "I've read this" colour is very similar to the normal colour, so maybe use a little asterisk or something, especially for colour-blind people. I would also have somewhere to see your inventory, maybe as an option on the menu? Lastly, I would use bolding to emphasize the important parts of the room.
But these are minor tweaks to a game that I genuinely loved playing. Great work!
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Thank you so much!! We definitely could tweak the color more, the "i've read this" colour tends to be a default thing Twine does automatically, but we could do a better job accounting for it and making it more accessible. Also, inventory is definitely a scrapped concept we didn't quite have enough time to add into the jam- I think it would help a lot for any future updates we do! And I would go ham on bolding relevant and important words. I appreciate all the feedback!