I have some feedback for you, I am loving the story and will try and read it all at one go, the is one improvement I would make it to ask can you make the text bigger cos even on my 10" tablet it's a little hard to read and maybe use "( times new roman BOLD )" Font to make it much easier on the eyes,
P.S. keep up the good work and if I think of any that may help once I finished read it I will leave more feedback.