Thank you.
I would like to congratulate you on including the opportunity to have the MC as either male or female, having played through as both I think it does change the feel of the story. Im impressed and a little surprised it isnt a more common thing to do, I appreciate that it is more work, but I am assuming that the story and many of the renders are much the same.
I also wanted to say that I was intrigued by the inclusion of Rachels Story on the menu, is that going to be the same story told through her eyes? Or perhaps the story from when the MC's father was around?
Finally, there are a few things in the text that you might want to look at. (My apologies if you've already changed them.)
Male MC to Rachel "(Damn, she was really just trying to be nice and I was a total bitch...)" - wrong gender
Jada to Male MC "Hehe, bitch..." - wrong gender
Steph "This is the company headquarters, all our prototypes are build and tested here." - built
MC to CJ "Yeah, good bye." - goodbye
MC to Katherine "I've seen you in the city today, you know..." - I saw
MC to Rachel "But don't you think that loosing her best friend would be bad for her, even with me being here?" - losing
Jada "So, were you look for me, or do you want to use the bathroom?" - looking