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(2 edits)

If the move can trigger during a speech, or after a speech is described, then I would remove the phrase:

During the speech

from the move. Or replace it with the word “Then,” to emphasize that it happens after the first part. As it is, “during the speech” sounds like you have to spend your hold before the speech has ended. But, if you’re preaching to them for a few days, they may do these things between sermons, rather than in the middle of one.

Also, it was unclear to me that this move could be triggered once from a series of sermons (as opposed to triggered multiple times). If that’s the case, removing the immediate language of “during the speech” would make that more clear, I think.

Fixed :)