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As a comment on how sad it is to realize that Sappho's words are lost forever, I find this extremely evocative and beautiful -- so much could fit; in the end, none does. You've captured the anxiety of trying to understand what someone must have meant when they said "X," what the significance of something shared between yourself and another person really was, very well in the layers of text that disappear once your cursor (attention) moves away from them.

I began with "6" and went backwards. I cannot tell you how much I love the fact that the last word one can render visible in the zine is "goad," because that's exactly what it's doing -- "I mean something," it insists, without ever giving it to you. I'm pleased you've linked (what I assume is) the sculpture referenced in the zine, too; I find they're visually reminiscent of each other, and the way the reference fronts a contrast between how stone-forms and words decay is lovely, too. 

Thank you for submitting this! It's a beautiful way to say goodbye to (and to remember) something that meant so much to you.

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... I forgot it might be useful to explain my ratings.

Experimentation - I gave this 4 stars simply because I've read works with disappearing/reappearing text before that deal with themes of forgetting and memory. I see it done in a way that makes loads of sense here, but I wonder if you could have subverted how tight the form/content connection is in this piece and if that would have (paradoxically) strengthened what you were trying to get your reader to feel/experience. Very much spitballing with this comment, but I hope it inspires something.

Interactivity - The poem's flow is entirely a function of the way the reader moves her cursor. Solid 5 in my book. 

Polish - So clean and pretty. Is there some way you could have hyperlinked the sculpture within the zine itself? I felt it added something important, but not all your readers may find it in the piece's description (due to not reading, not clicking out, etc.).

Poetry - On a sliding scale of game (1) to poetry (5), this is definitely poetry.

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what a thoughtful set of replies! i am, perhaps unfortunately, a bit of a formalist, so a tight relationship between form & content is something i prize quite a bit. however, i will consider the use of a looser connection next time i sit down to make a hyperpoem, maybe i'll even drop you a line to hear more about your thoughts on the matter.

thank you so much, i'm looking forward to playing with your submission early this week.