Say I just played the game with a friend and I think it's quite nice. My friend think there are problems here though. Such as when the MC talks to himself, he tends to use complicated words. Majority of time when he talk to himself need to be cut down a bit, especially the flashback scene. That's what my friend suggested. Other than that, the game has some weird English here and there but I think it's still nice. Some more tweaks from time to time would certainly help too.
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Thank you for playing our game!
Yes, we have received similar feedback from other peers and we are checking on it. After replaying the game a bit more slowly, we realized similar things like you mentioned. There's definitely some improvements to be made, specially in the selection of words and in some long-winded parts.
We would like to correct these and upload a new version of the demo with the revised text, hopefully sounding more natural and keeping the flow of the game.
Stay tuned!