I do not know how to say this without it sounding rude, but it's not my intention honestly! This game really needs a proofreader. I'm not sure if you are actually aware of this. Check your script out, and you will notice very often there are missing words in sentences, and also wrong words to describe stuff.
It can be very difficult at times to even read some of the things the characters are saying due to a combination of things, which could be very quickly fixed just by adding the missing words and correcting sentences using the right syntax. I really like this game very much, and I am willing to proofread for you, for free.
If there is someone already proofreading for you, then they are doing a terrible job, sorry.