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Let me make a quick check on the script..

There are 29 instances of the word "hummingbird" used in the game.

Welp, we will have to rewrite a lot of those instances. I feel like there are one or two recurring phrases that are used way too heavily. Thank you for pointing it out, we saw a bunch of responses like this on the survey. When we get back to writing after our break we will address these.

Feel more than free to suggest more lines that you think might be overused.

Typokun3 years ago(+1)(-1)

Just as a suggestion? don't remove them completely, having both asterius and storm refering to migraines (or whatever they're supposed to be...) the same way actually ads a bit to their parallel stories.

GEMOTO3 years ago(-1)

And now I must sow a mischievous seed, that of TINTINNABULATION! A word I learned from Sir Jacob Collier that refers to ringing bells and looping layers of swarms of sound. I can only pray that this word appears at least once. Here's a sound bite I'm thinking of, timestamped at 10:16 :

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