Before giving any critique, I want to say that this is probably one of my favorite visual novels ever, and has some amazing potential. Alas, I want to give some critique due to the fact that I want this to be better. Art is really nice and cute, and visual element is pretty much perfect.
Now the writing is where I have a few nitpicks. There are some spelling mistakes, they don't distract from the story but I would like to see them ironed out at some point.
Pacing is weird, like how the first two days are more or less complete, and then the following week or so passes in a few sentences, there are some obvious time skips when the writer wants to progress things, which feel out of place. I would hope for smoother or more subtle transitions in the future.
Lyall is my precious cute wolfman, but he feels somewhat two-dimensional, with some clear inspiration being taken from characters of similar games like FBTW and Adastra. I am not saying that he is a boring or a cookie-cutter character, but I would love to see some more development to his personality in the future.
With all that being said, I want to reiterate that these two points are subjective, and others might disagree. My point is to give some critisism towards areas that I myself find lacking, and not to just say this for the sake of being mean.
Atmac, this is an amazing game, with more potential than the counterparts I compared it to. I really want to say that I appreciate what you have done so far, and I hope you will turn this into something amazing.
5 stars.