Good tweet text! Also some good stuff in the Pitch Deck - you should totally add more images etc throughout the pitch deck to spruce it up and give the reader more of a feel for the game as they're reading. Also remove anything that says N/A, if it's not applicable then don't include it. Check out this example pitch deck from the clever people at Chucklefish:
https://docs.google.com/presentation/d/18VijoCAzJiQwA4UUks9qVA_TPXRjL78aoywE9rdL...