Climbing the Tower of Babel in a Classic RPG Roguelike hybrid is a great premise!
Suggestions:
-- Make sure you highlight your Unique Selling Points in your pitch tweet.
-- Ask someone to proofread and edit for you.
-- Avoid unnecessary hashtags as they limit space you can use to describe your game.
-- Your Trailer looks like a good start but would be better used to showcase Gameplay and Game Scenes for most of the time rather than panels of text.