Was interested in playing, but I can't get passed the grammar issues in the prologue.
If you can't be bothered to check your dialogue/text it makes it harder for anyone else to pick up and get into your game.
If your intro is poorly written the expectation is that so is the rest of the game,
I might check in down the line, but for now I am out. At least halfway decent grammar is a must for me and your intro is like a foreign language was thrown into google translate