Alright, maybe I'm fucked in the head, but all the grammar and punctuation mistakes were really distracting. I'd recommend using google docs to write the game so it corrects you as you write. God knows it's saved my bacon more than I can count.
Other than that, interesting story and excellent atmosphere. Really liked the music that rose in volume as the MC got more nervous, and the cool-ass cutscene at the end (which I accidentally skipped, you might want to disable that before you show it).
I really liked the schizo atmosphere, I guess now I know how basket feels every day.
If you polish it up, it's got a load of potential. You can do it fam.