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I like some of the descriptions and phrasings very much! Good setting, and I could see clearly in my mind most of what was described.

Some phrasing was a bit awkward, and there were some mechanical issues with repeated words (for example, in the first paragraph,  you use "in his tower" twice in the same sentence). Also, at the beginning, it was difficult to know who was talking--earlier use of tags might help.

Lovely prose, though! I liked the "sweet perfume of old memory and bitter scents of sorrow", as well as the paragraph with "On every page lay the fruits of my life..."