Very compelling! The way the risk increases with each realization, leaving you wondering by the end whether anything is safe at all... Well done.
I'm sure the nature of the writing jam affected your editing process, but the layout of the piece and various technical issues were a little distracting. If you were to clean up the missing (or extra) punctuation, and other typos, you'd have a story to be reckoned with!
But great job overall. The ending was really punchy!