Yeah I'm still a bit of an amateur. So I'll have to look into a proofreader for my stuff (maybe I should pay for a Grammarly subscription). I honestly could not figure out how to separate the third person viewpoint from the captain's first person viewpoint. Sorry about the confusing moments. It's hard to make a complex story in under 1,000 words, but I am planning on extending the story to the events leading up to the monologue, just like what I plan to do with my first story.
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You did great, really! The story was intriguing. A proofreader is a good idea, even just having a trusted friend read it over (but make sure they know you aren't looking for just a pat on the back, or that's often all a friend will give you!). I'm still an amateur too, but everything we write makes us better!