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This was great! I actually thought the cliffhanger would happen after the point when Clash said his theory, so I was pleasantly surprised that it wasn't over.

I like the use of the unreliable narrator, but I didn't like how the MC always comes across as accusatory even if you try to be friendly. I think it might be better if friendly MC brings it up with Clash after talking with the suspect instead.

Also not sure if this is a plot hole, but wouldn't the manager have recognized the MC?

Anyway, I'll also echo that I love Clash as a character. I enjoyed it overall, just needs a bit of polishing. Great job!

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With the manager, each of his answers was supposed to hint that he's scared of the MC.  That was also supposed to tie in to why the MC was fired: for being a douchebag, not for being organic.  Which, in turn, ties in to why the MC is so accusatory: they're a jerk who thinks they are smarter than they are who is trying to keep a detective off his tracks.  Unfortunately, for as loud as I shouted those bits in my head, they were very quiet in actual words.  ^^;  As I've said to others, I'm still learning the ropes of IF.

Thank you for the review!  I am so glad people like Clash as much as I do.  :-)