I love narrative based games. I think you have a good writing style that can really draw a player in. One idea to add is something that makes replayability a bit easier. When I was going through for a third time or so, I get tired of having to wait for the text to play out. If you could use the spacebar or another key to just blast to the end of the text/skip to the next bit of text that would be cool and make it easier to explore different narrative paths. Nice entry to the jam - well done!!