I enjoyed the demo! The art, animation, and humor are quite nice. I do notice that there are some typos, misspellings, and oddly worded phrases! I recommend getting some proofreaders or doing a closed beta in the future for help with catching those things, because it will improve the game even more!
Thanks for playing and thanks a lot for the feedback! You are absolutely right about the writing. At the moment I was more concerned with whether the dialogues were understandable and the players could follow the scenes and the story without any problem. But I really understand what you said about the weird writing and I'll try to fix all the typos and spelling errors for the next update. Thanks again!