Pretty good start to everything. See some interesting possibilities. A lot of typos but you are just one person and I assume this demo version was put together rather quickly. If you'd like any help with the story, characters and/or editorial stuff such as fixing typos and improving the existing dialogue, I'd be happy to help.
Yep, just me developing the game for now and I'm already working on fixing the dialogues. The help it's really appreciated, but I really don't want to have people working on this for free (I can't afford hiring people this early). Still, if you have any feedback or suggestions feel free to send them to me and I'll take them on count.