I already mentioned this about the dissonance clashing a bit too much. Or should I say, it's feeling excessive. Just so you know, I love dissonance, and I know how sometimes it just sounds right to us even through I'm told by other people it is "wrong". What I have found is that it has to come up every so often or it reads as off-key. (And maybe make the purposefully off-key chord last longer so it doesn't read as an accident?)
I like the rhythmical pattern of the base, though. I would give that base another melody line and that may do it. Also, some drum beats for dynamics. Best of luck,