Example 1: Calls cougar that owns 7-11.
Lady: I remebersss you, detective boyyy... Yes, heehee... This ish Cathriness.
MC: Huh, she doesn't sound like herself. She is talking in a very strange manner. Am I even talking to the right person?
This guy is supposed to be a detective and can't tell when someone is drunk? The audience/reader of this visual novel is intended to know her text has all the hallmarks of being drunk but our hero appears clueless.
Example 2: when he's arguing with the succubus lady in his head.
MC: "This is just a dream. It's all in my head. I need to wake up and focus on finding out-"
Succubus: "-what happened to your guardians."
MC: "How do you know about them!?"
If he believes this person is his own mind, why is he violently surprised that the dream entity is finishing his sentences? If anything, it should be proof that he really is talking to himself. Makes me feel like this guy is a moron.
There are a lot of other examples here and there that I don't remember near the beginning and other bits of bad writing throughout.
Meh, there have been worse VNs. I usually make comments like this when I am disappointed. The premise and sandbox elements sound neat.
[EDIT]: I remember that multiple (at least 3-4) characters say, "You're funny. Have you thought about being a comedian?" when confronted. This is lazy writing.
I've read your replies and don't think I'll convince you otherwise. And I promise I don't try to. Will just leave my comments here.
Ex. 1 imo u just misinterpret here. it's not that he "can't tell when someone is drunk". He understands that she's drunk. When he says that he can't recognise her he means that the 1st impression she left was that she's a respectable/ high status / serious business lady who acts responsibly so her being drunk conflicts with his first impression of her.
Ex. 2 well that I assume is a "let's introduce this new entity to the player & explain it to him too" moment. it's more to explain to the player rather than to the character
comedian comment is a running joke and actually developer's self-irony moment where he ironises about his own character/story/dialogue writing skills. which I quite like (both his writing and him joking about it)
Here's the thing, LurkSkywalker. The developer didn't say these were misinterpretations when they responded. They intended them to be interpreted the way I did and that I should not "judge too early my friend. You'll know why he says all those things later. ;) "
Classic "I meant to do that" and not admitting they could ever be anything but a genius.
I'm glad you found a game you like. 100% of the characters having the same "are you sure you aren't a comedian" mannerism could be a hint that the author doesn't know how to write unique dialog for different characters. If you find it endearing, again, I am happy for you.
I hope Moolah Milk finishes Deviant Anomalies and makes it brimming with content. I'm out this time, but since there is a lot to like besides the writing, I'll keep an eye out for their next project.
"are you sure you aren't a comedian" is a line repeated by many characters since the first episode of the game. It's ironical due to the humor/dark tone I like to put in the game. But also don't you feel there's something more to it? As I've mentioned, you will find out later why later on. Same with the church. Clues are everywhere already, you'll know if you've missed them. It's a quite a thinking game and not straightforward, I like such stories.