This is pretty interesting so far. The art is great, and the direction of the writing is good. The story also seems fun, same as with the world. I also really like the characters and a lot of the themes going on here with the H scenes.
if there is any one issue though, its that the english writing is rough. Like, really, really rough. It feels like those translated japanese H games where they weren't very familiar with english, and this actually causes a lot of the mood to leave. However I think with some editing, and revisions, this could be one of the better H games out there.
keep up the good work, because i'll be back to check out any free updates. At least until the writing is fixed, then I'll check out the paid updates too XD