Finished this one and I do think it's a really interesting story. I would play the next chapter to see where it's going. The visual style is very holistic and consistent, and the environments, especially the buildings, look really good. You clearly put a lot of thought into the structure of the story and it unfolds in a compelling way. (And thanks for giving me a hint, haha.)
The main thing I'd work on is just the sheer amount of text. It's definitely quite a bit wordier than it needs to be, to the extent that it's interfering with my enjoyment of the story. Trimming it to be more concise would make it a much tighter and therefore even more compelling story.