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First of all, I know you said that you don't care anymore but I will still write my response because I have free time now and just in case you care again. It's been almost a week after all.

So yeah, man.. Here I was just trying to prove that, during the Victoria part, our "MC planned it, it's not just luck" but here we go. You provided more examples of what you deemed as "idiocy" in the story. But seeing that you didn't say anything about the "just lucky, no planning" part, I'd just assume that you now agree with me on that part. Okay? So it is clear to me that you actually reread the story evidenced by the new points you brought up. I don't know why you started from the beginning of the game(maybe no savefiles?) but it's ok. I will address the things you've written about. First...

During the convent, when questioning the sisters, he shows that he was really trying to conclude the case, he doesn't scoff, he's focused

As someone who worked with police and investigators, you probably know that this is the initial investigation. Taking witness/suspect accounts, noting down clues in the scene, etc. so it makes sense for MC to be focused. Now I know you're saying that if the MC is focused here when dealing with the nuns then surely if he acts like a fool later Victoria will know what's up right? Don't worry, I will address it later. For now, this...

seeing him trying to pressure his sister Delilah for example was a joke

Hmm... How come? Just because of how he asked "are you lying to me" to Delilah? Let me remind you that the player can only accuse Delilah after seeing the gash on her hand and the nail with fresh blood. So let's put you in that situation. You, brave guy, in Delilah's shoes. You lied to the detective about not going to the library, detective accuses you "are you lying to me?", you laugh in his face as you said then detective suddenly says he found fresh blood on a bent nail in the shelves and will check if it matches yours, what now? Well, I bet you'll say that if it were you, you wouldn't have said anything at all in the first place. With all the lawyers you worked with, they prolly advised to avoid telling anything to authorities without the presence of a lawyer. But alas, you aren't Delilah. And it's pretty common for real life people to talk to authorities in these types of situations especially when a close associate died. Given that, I'd say what MC did is effective in applying some psychological pressure. Next...

it only gets worse when he goes to accuse Teresa, she literally played with him there

Huh? Teresa played with MC? I reread the 'accusing Teresa' part and MC didn't do the "kick the door" shit as you said. He was confrontational, yes, but he never went too far and only after Teresa admitted about "lying during the 911 call about a violent crime so the cops will arrive faster". He then used that timing to accuse her of being power-hungry, a possible motive to kill Anna. Naturally, this sends Teresa into defensive mode and reveals more info about her opinions on sister Anna, she even offers her own insight that it might be the gardener. Isn't this what investigators want? The more info acquired during the initial investigation, the better for them. Also, MC can clearly see that she's got a fierce personality just from the way she carries herself so why did you say this....

an aggressive approach only works when you have a sense of the person's personality, and he clearly didn't have that

Anyone can tell that Teresa has this superior vibe on her just based on how she acts and speaks. Why the hell would Teresa get out of there? Where would she go? Ask for a lawyer? Heck, she would've bitchslapped MC right then and there instead. But she didn't. Why? Because MC said "being power-hungry is her motive for murder", which she considered a silly accusation considering she likes Sister Anna and the politics between them is just a strategy to keep the novitiates in line. She even says "I thought you are incompetent when I first saw you. But you are even much more useless than I thought". This shows that she was confident from the start and is a safe target for the MC to use a provocative approach on because he knows that she will stand her ground and defend herself instead of refusing to speak or getting out of there. Given all that, it's clear that MC got what he wanted out of Teresa and not him getting played or whatever. Next...

he didn't play the clown around the sisters, so making a fool of himself around Victoria would obviously be a trap

So this is it. The sisters know how he acted during this part so surely Victoria will notice if MC is acting the fool later right? Wrong. Remember what MC did during the investigation. He kept accusing everyone of being the culprit. Blatantly to their face like he's entirely convinced. So let's imagine the situation where Victoria asks the nuns what they think of the MC. Teresa will probably say "incompetent detective with a silly imagination" and Miriam will say "he lacks intelligence and wisdom". But it's different for Delilah and Eve. Delilah is the one that felt the most pressured by the MC, she won't tell them that she was in the library that night and will just say what she felt. "Scared and intimidated". Now with Eve. She won't tell them that the MC managed to connect the dots between her and sister Anna because this'll expose that they were ex-lovers but she will still say her impression of MC, "seems competent enough". So with these, what would Victoria think? The senior nuns say "incompetent" but the novitiates see differently. So she followed MC in order to evaluate him personally. The moment she sees MC acting foolishly, she becomes convinced that the senior nuns are correct and the novitiates were mistaken. Makes sense too if we view it from a "trust" angle, Victoria has been working with the senior nuns for far longer than with the novitiates. She will naturally be inclined to favor Teresa, someone she handpicked herself 9 years ago, over Eve who's only been there for 1 year. She will never think she's caught in a trap because the MC's actions she saw and the actions reported by her most trusted sister Teresa are consistent with each other. Next...

Historical mistakes also happen, like the spear, this one was heartbreaking (lolwut?)

History huh. To make things clear, this is what Teresa said verbatim "The recovery of said lance was what inspired the Crusaders to take the offensive against the Muslims during the First Crusade". Where did she say that it was the reason for the First Crusade? It ISN'T even remotely feasible to say that she implied it in her words. Where did you even get this?! Not just that, what the hell is Antiquoia? It was called Antioch back then and currently Antakya at the present (Nevermind, I guess Antioquia is Portuguese? Spanish? I apologize for assuming you browse in English). But, where did you get 200,000? I am genuinely asking because the Muslim combatants involved in Antioch during this totals to ~65k - 75k only. And you also got the battle part wrong. You said that the boosted morale Crusaders drove the Muslim siege out of the city BUT Kerbogha didn't even get inside in the first place. The Crusaders ACTUALLY marched out of Antioch and engaged the Muslim outside of the city then routed them. With these mistakes, I'd say you're the one teaching wrong things. Well, at least the Peter the Hermit and Pope Urban II part is correct but, sadly, this is irrelevant because Teresa didn't even say that the lance was the cause of the crusade anyway. Next...

injecting someone with an unknown substance, and on top of that directly into the bloodstream

Science, I see. Finally something we can both agree on. I also thought that this wiretap in bloodstream is something that will eventually kill Victoria. You, physics guy, clearly thought so too but alas, we need to remind ourselves that this is a story and, like every other story, has a setting. This one is set in Netherhelm. Where an inexplicable snowstorm hit twice already. Where authorities are stretched thin with sooo many cases that they're forced to leave a single, newbie policewoman in charge of a murder scene while awaiting the arrival of detectives. A place where the MC met a woman that can turn invisible; fought a huge dick spider and two fucking humanoid monsters; got the shit beaten and clawed out of him by one yet he quickly recovered just within a couple of days without even going to a hospital. Surely with all the scifi shit above, one totally safe, 100% guaranteed no side effects bloodstream wiretap hardly seems unbelievable. This is just that type of story. Regarding the veins...

it is not easy to hit a vein

Most likely, the MC used the exterior jugular vein. It's easy to find and, as I said with the scifi sht above, MC perfectly hitting a vein is a hundred times more realistic. Heck, during the Sage quest kidnapping, Tiny accidentally gave him a possibly lethal dose yet he escaped and even drank a few beers with Sage, all with just a couple hours in between. Next, Victoria's "reflex act"...

Anyone would have recoiled from the pain, and she knew he was a detective, it was obvious something was wrong

Okay. There has been multiple real life reports where people, after contact with someone else, felt numb or tingly in a part of their body only to realize that they've been fucking stabbed by a knife. Not only that, there were also people that felt tingly in their fingers only to find out that their shoulders are fucked instead. Heck, during my COVID vaccination, I looked away so I won't see the needle pierce my flesh and was surprised when nurse said it's finished. I knew it was coming yet I didn't feel anything from start to finish. Taking all these in consideration, we go to the scene in front the church after MC revealed his master plan to corner the Mother Superior; Victoria jumped and hugged MC thinking something like "hehe sucker.. I'm the Mother Superior" then she felt tingly in her neck during the hug and she dismissed it as the lewd/rough caress of MC. Is that really so unbelievable? Heck, we can even add the fact that the wiretap syringe seemed like it's an autoinjector plus with all the established scifi aspects of the story, it seems plausible that Moe was able to at least create a syringe capable of stealthily and painlessly injecting the wiretap in a target. A prick in the neck going unnoticed can happen. Next then...

How did he not see that he had a second camera?

Masked henchman dude. Man, ok seriously. Let's say I ordered you to quickly remove a security camera before the MC can retrieve it. You then estimate that MC will be in the church for around 5 - 10mins. Time is short. But you can't just stand next to the cam while looking up at it suspiciously to figure out how to remove the memory card. So you decided to just yank the whole cam out. Seeing that you're dealing with a wall cam, you ready your tools, checked the nearby walls for other security cams and waited for the passersby to clear out. When the opportunity arises, you quickly got in there, unscrewed the cam, yanked it out and hauled ass all within 20 - 30secs. Clean work or so you thought. An adult shih tzu inside a trash bin was watching you quietly from start to finish. Now to our masked guy. Who would even watch out for cams inside a trash bin? Not to mention the time constraint and its not like he can just stop when a pedestrian witnesses him; So the moment the coast is clear, he just goes in and focuses entirely on removing the wall cam ASAP. Utmost priority is getting the "footage" in the cam out of MC's reach. Heck, the moment I saw that cam in trash bin , my first thoughts were "would be a shame if the garbage truck comes" and "hope no hobo digs in there" but you went for the "blind" route instead and to that, I say: mask or no mask, that dude won't see the cam or a Shih tzu in the trash bin because he will NOT even look there in the first place. (As long as the Shih tzu stays quiet of course)

So, I think I addressed every point you brought up. If it's as you said and you actually read, reread and reread again (Wow! 3 times. 3 fucking times lol) then with all those mistakes you wrote above, I'm a bit worried if you actually wrote a book. I'll give you the benefit of the doubt and believe that you did this calmly and patiently(lol) but it can't be denied that you didn't read critically. I don't know if it's your reading comprehension that needs improving or you stubbornly refusing to understand the scenes and dialogue presented in the story. Like that history one. I can't believe you tried to say that "Teresa speaks as if the spear was the reason for the first crusade". You even gave false tidbits of info regarding the siege of Antioch after saying Teresa is teaching wrong things. Ironic and truly heartbreaking.

the mistakes don't stop there, there's a lot of shit ahead

Of all the things you brought up, the wiretap in bloodstream is the only thing I agree with. Dev could've just made it a subdermal implant injected in the area around the rhomboid minor and the levator scapulae and it'll be significantly less dangerous vs in the bloodstream. But even then, with all the quick healing and invisibility and actual monsters, this is clearly something scifi/fantasy stuff at play here. It may be lazy writing but it still works and makes sense.

With all your talk of being someone who likes to read and write, I wish you the best. I don't know much about writing but I'm certain that you can still improve on your reading. Maybe you just honestly misunderstood some sentences given that English is not your first language but that's even more reason to think your words through before saying that you understand everything. The history "mistakes(lol)" you said above is what convinced me that I'm dealing with someone who ignores the context of the dialogue and twists it to fit his case. And frankly, I think they can't be reasoned with. Goodbye.

P.S.

I could write a book on how not to be a detective using this MC as an example

I doubt it(lmao) but, if you do, let me know so I can read it. I do crave a tearjerker every once in a while.