The story really easily pulled you into the game at the beginning by making you wanna find the girl andI really loved the art style (the red color really contributed to creating the vibe). Well, nothing I can say more because of the visual novel genre (It's not like you have some mechanics to judge but the one thing you had to do (I mean creating a story) was done incredibly well.
Even if I couldn't give you too much feedback because I am not a writer, I would really appreciate it if you would give feedback on my entry too.