Hello there LadyBex, it took me more than a month to get back to you due to life obligations (from work to other stuff)! And because what I am doing is more of a passion now, I can barely find time for it! Anyways, I have played your game over a week now (did not finish the entire story though) and I can say it is really interesting visual novel! Well done espacially if this is your first one... Below you will find a part of the Gameplay recorded (didn't want to have the video long for the followers sake) and some additional feedback:
♦ Game Idea: Very unique idea for a Visual Novel, being a writer myself I can see the creative writing within you in this game! It is rather the idea or the concept for the story for Visual Novels to be great, with other elements of course to make it more interesting.
♦ Gameplay: Visual Novels don't depend much on the gameplay as much as it depends on the story itself, but this does not mean you can't have some gameplay parts, such as having more options to choose from to have an impact on some characters and the critical path of the game (Which I think you already did so, I just did not go too far in the game, will try to finish it in my spare time though). It is also better to have the game set in chapters, this will ensure the players to know what parts of the game they have finished or reached, it is also something that content creators look for; in order to ease things up for episodes and parts to upload!
♦ Story: One of the unique stories about Visual Novels that I have played recently, it has been a while since I saw a good story like this, the mystery behind the entire Sci-Fi part, the worlds mixing together, and the characters themselves! I honestly love the setting of old times, like the Dark Ages and Victorian Era (I studied American & British Literature and Civilization, majoring in both with a Master Degree, so it is something that I really love and admire, I also can help a little bit regarding that).
♦ Artwork: There are certain art styles for each Visual Novel, I understand this is the style for your game but would have been better to showcase the items and backgrounds in a better way (There is an example with a screen attatched showing how much it is hard to see things around the room, espacially with that usage of colors! It looks like there are 2 wolrds mixed together on that photo, could be wrong though, but surely would have been amazing to notice that easily when playing the game).
♦ Audio: Very nice background music and sound tracks. As a suggestion, you could use more sound effects for certain events, like knocking on the door, jumping from the window, having some footsteps in certain places...etc! It is also great to see some voice acting or voice overs, this could be done as I know some starters in this field that would be happy to do this for free for the sake of having their names on a game!
♦ Bugs & Constructive Criticism: I do not think I found any bug, for the game progress is great and good! Loved the humour parts of this game, can surely say that the Audio part need some work for some sound effects, other than this would say the story of the game does a great job keeping the interest of players.
♦ Things to Double Down on: I have read from other ppl comments on your game page how much they loved your story, keep going and writing, you have a great vision!
In case you need any help or just me testing the game further more (probably way much faster when asked without making a video about XD) just let me know, you can contact me on my Instagram or Discord, these two are what I use more often!
