Good job on a narrative-focused game! I think the atmosphere for this one was done well - the apathetically morbid tone of the characters was great and the minimal and humorous dialogue made for an amusing contrast to the subject matter. I wasn't quite sure where this was going to go - you obviously had a blast making a creative world within which lurk a range of dark and creepy characters.
For constructive criticism, I think a narrative-focused game probably needs some sort of closure; the ending was anticlimactic and confusing. Moreover some sort of interaction to give the player a sense of agency would enhance the 'on rails' focus of the game. Thanks again for contributing to the SCREAM JAMs and I hope you keep on making a bunch of unique, creepy games on the site!