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The custom art in this game is really beautiful and parts of the dialogue were rather witty, but a larger majority felt forced and awkward / like it didn't fully fit with the overall tone and aesthetic of the game. It did make me laugh that the entire story was based around Juno's lack of strawberries -- and riding on a penguin made me laugh!

Overall, I think you have an interesting start to something with this one, but there are parts that could definitely use some more time and polish. I hope you keep working on this one!

Thanks, Erin! I am definitely looking forward to make this a complete, polished game. I suppose what felt awkward to you were the jokes about modern-day stuff? (taxes, for example). If so, I definitely can understand why you would feel it's forced, maybe the type of humour is not everyone's liking (and that's completely fine!). I am happy to have made you laugh with the other silly elements, though.

I appreciate your input dearly :).

That was exactly it -- we're in this fantastical world, which is super well-established, and then BAM, back to the real world. But, like you mentioned, it could just not be for me in that regard. :)