wow, what an impressive project from you guys. you have built such a rich world and landscape, and it was such a pleasure to read it and get brought in to that world. the writing was so evocative, and you built up such an energy and feeling throughout the piece, it was really neatly done.
i wrote a little comment about each chapter, and i was going to put that in this comment, but it got wayy too long oops, so you can read that here if you want to. amazing work!