Thank you! I'm happy it made a positive emotional impact on you. I wanted to present that contradiction between normal people living their life while there's something uncommon and important going on.
Regarding the dog and potential buyers, I can imagine all the Sol System would be after the players if the discovered that. The OPA would be very interested in the matter too, and we could have an interesting conflict growing here. Could be the beginning of an overarching campaign.
That's my first time writing an adventure, and I'm probably influenced by the way the official adventures are written. After reading both your comments here and on your page, I re-read your adventure and could understand it better. I might write a one-page adventure soon for the Community's jam, so it's a chance to experiment another way of dealing with the narrative information.