Hi Blayke;
Not many days ago I finished reading Straight!? Now I'm back to New Hope (I started reading it back in January but it got lost in the shuffle).
Now that I've discovered you were Aaryn's co-writer I wanted to share with you what I told him. I worked as an editor for a science fiction magazine for three and a half years. An editor's main job is buying the stories for the magazine. Straight!? had the one quality that always guarenteed I would buy a story from someone, even if it was their first try at selling their work. Characters that I cared about! I don't care how well (or poorly) written a story is, but if I get invested into the characters to the point where I really need to know what happens to them -- that's a top notch story. It help a lot that Zack reminded me so much of myself. I'm enjoying what you've done with New Hope and look forward to seeing more.
PS with a couple of hints, I had Theo figured out well in advanced. But Eyal -- ooo, there's so many questions about him. I have suspicions; several in fact. But he's hard to read! The lunch conversation about the camping suddenly got me wondering about Ethan. Apparently he doesn't remember so . . .
Yeah. You've got me hooked! Good job and keep it up.
Editor comments (sorry, old habits die hard). In the history class and in one other spot, Mrs. was repeatedly written as Mrs.s Not sure what happened there but hopefully that's an easy typo to correct. When Justin is practicing outdoors, he sometimes refers to the ground as the floor. Stick with floor indoors and ground outdoors for consistency.