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Pros :

- Trifold pamphlet scenario. I'm loving these, it's a brilliant mechanism for making authors cut the fat out of a scenario and ensure all the information is immediately accessible to the Ref in play.

- I learned about a new, fascinating superstructure that existed in our reality.

Cons :

- Not many. The superstructure is intrinsically labyrinthian to outsiders, but FIST's goal requires hitting specific parts in a specific order which seems like it might be cumbersome. (I haven't played it, so I might be way off.)  

- TERMITE has the word Time too many times - "3 times" would be better as "thrice".  SUNFLOWER is missing the word "for" at one point. 

- Look, I'm trying real hard to offer criticism here, it's a fantastic looking trifold, get it if you haven't yet.

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Thanks for the critique! Proofreading is the first casualty of solo writing projects. I'll fix that and re-upload it when I get a chance.

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Oh and I wanted to have some kind of puzzle for the adventure, so I added the clues and the scientist so players have something to figure out. Obviously it's easy to modify how to shut off the machine.