https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jBrW7ld2JtG2KV7Et_WzmXJwetvwWkUUrmldcgqlFYc/...
Hello there! I played through and really enjoyed your visual novel, and you asked others to share any grammatical errors that they found! Since I was bored, and because I loved your story so much, I thought why not compile a scene-by-scene heavily opinionated analysis of the style of your game, hopefully so it’s easier for you to improve it! Feel free to take this into consideration only if you want to, I’ll love your game regardless of whether you care about this feedback ☺. It is also verrrryyy nitpicky at points, and I’m not following any language or style guide, just my personal preferences. (Anyone with the link to this document can comment, so be nice, and let me know if I have a bad take lol)
I originally planned on doing more but basically only did the first introductory bit. If you want me to do more, let me know! I'll keep this updated as I go through my second playthrough each weekend. This is a love letter for version 1.0 of Roads Yet Traveled, and I can’t wait to read the following chapters! Thank you for making one of my favorite visual novels of all time.
Respectfully,
dvartho