Skip to main content

On Sale: GamesAssetsToolsTabletopComics
Indie game storeFree gamesFun gamesHorror games
Game developmentAssetsComics
SalesBundles
Jobs
TagsGame Engines
(+1)

-Tell the player about the menu button at the start. "The menu button near your nose" is too cryptic and the little chevron is easy to miss.

-Add the option to have the music loop.

-I don't see an inventory anywhere. If you let go of the mouse button before reading what an item does you're SOL.

-There doesn't seem to be any way to restart the game other than deleting the cookie.

-Backtracking is a nightmare with all the arbitrary one-way paths and jumping back and forth between pages. Needs a map, or at the very least "tight" needs to be colored to stand out better.

-Tooltips for player cards during combat are blurry.

-The brain scrambler is really RNG heavy since you have to use the singular hole card to be able to hurt it at all. I thought it was one of those fights you were meant to lose at first. Can enemies steal the hole card?

-The tooltip for the card you get from the brain scrambler goes outside the edge of the screen.

Some misspellings/typos/grammar mistakes I noticed:

P 54: automata --> automaton

P 55: much hits --> many hits; attacks --> attack(s); stallmate --> stalemate

P 57: missing "an" before "overly"; don't panic --> not panic

P 39: on --> one

P 70: phenomenon --> phenomena

P 72 : Probably the phenomenon has --> The phenomenon has probably

P 67: Missing comma in last sentence.

P 76: a form --> the form

There were some missing articles I noticed earlier, but again, I can't restart the game to double check.

Thanks for the proof reading, that's a lifesaver since I would never notice it on my own. You can restart the game in the menu through Save & Close.

The arbitrary one way path is there for a reason, but I guess I need to add it to the texts. Same goes for the brain scrambler difficulty. Defeating him is not advised, and will make you miss some content. I guess that's why you judged the roundabout path as annoying.

Inventory is out of scope for now. And enemy can steal any card.

I wanted to ask how was your general experience, but after attempting the brain scrambler fight and actually defeating him I get the idea.