Holy cow! This is rough and needs a beta, but aside from the technicalities, the story drew me in instantly and I already adore the characters and hate that I can't choose more than one option. I loved the sibling hang out as much as the awkward 2 sentence exchange with N. And I want the pillows AND snacks. But I chose and the story went on and while the directly opposed sides are clear, you are per design stuck in the middle. It's awesome and I can't wait how our protagonist might be able to spin this! I hope you find one or two dedicated beta readers to help you edit and refine this gem to truly shine!
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there's a writer's lounge with all kinds of IF writers to share resources or try for betas etc. there. I'm not very good with deadlines and take way too long for most people to do the beta, but you might have better luck making some connections there? If you can't find anybody via tumblr or discord, you can message me again, but as I said, I'm very slow, so I'm reluctant to agree and then probably disappoint.