Skip to main content

Indie game storeFree gamesFun gamesHorror games
Game developmentAssetsComics
SalesBundles
Jobs
TagsGame Engines
(+2)

This is an extremely good base for a game, at least when it comes to visuals and gameplay mechanics. 

I would really like to actually get to know the characters as people though and it would be great if the English was brushed up a bit. I understand that it probably isn't your first language, but seeing as how the rest of the game is of such a great quality, it would be nice if the storytelling aspects were up to par. I suspect this will be done in future updates, but I thought I'd mention it nonetheless.

If you want some inspiriation on how to do writing that's at least on the same level as your visuals, check out the game Divine Dawn on this site, it absolutely blew me away with its storytelling and character depth.

Anyway, good luck with the continued development of this sonn-to-be gem of a game!

(+1)

Thank you very much!

I find it challenging to write natural-sounding dialogue and engaging narratives in English, but I will do my best to improve it in the future.

I'll look into Divine Dawn, I should play and read more to improve!

(+2)

Thank you for the response!

Given that there's obviously this much passion behind this project, I think you will find that the characters almost write themselves at some point in the future. I might not speak for everyone here but I think it's great if you can get to know them on a mental level at least as much as a physical one.

Cheers!

(+1)

That is how I feel. The more I write, the more fun it is because they begin to develop their own personalities! btw, we just released 0.2 build, so make sure to check it out!

(+1)

Sounds great, I'll check it out when I can!