Having read some of dangpa's previous (non VN) works long ago, I expected the writing to be less cohesive or a bit harder to follow, but that's definitely not the case here, as the pacing, the dialogue and the information are presented in a manner that makes it very pleasant to read overall. A couple typos and a couple short sentences that might get just a little bit close to purple prose territory, but otherwise, it's enjoyable through and through, and I particularly enjoyed the character study approach that the story seems to have thus far, having ample time to focus on specific characters, without neglecting world building or Howl's development, specially considering dangpa's impeccable taste in husbandos.The UI has plenty of fun elements, it looks and handles nicely, and the art is banger as per usual, leaving aside bgs that may or may not be placeholders to some extent (?). Other than that, a couple more songs would've improved the experience significantly in my opinion, whether original or royalty free tunes for ambiance. I'm still intrigued by the lack of sprites as well, wondering if that makes it easier or harder to work on future content, but aesthetically, it's a nice change of pace compared to most VNs out there and it looks pretty great... so yeah, it was a very enjoyable read and I'm already excited to get more of it.
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Thank you for the review! I'm always looking for feedback. Thankfully since I'm tackling this in a VN fashion rather than a comic, I've had a bit more time to ruminate on what I want the story to be and the direction of it all (plus learning from past mistakes). I also don't have to focus on all the elements that go into comics. I'm sure I'll fumble a bit, but I have a pretty good idea in mind of where it's heading.
For Backgrounds- do you have any, in particular, you didn't like or liked? All of them are drawn by me, and admittedly, I'm no BG artist; But I'm certainly taking this project as a way to learn!
Mostly the one in the apartment, it looks a bit too desolate, partially due to the lack of color, but also because of how unnervingly symmetrical it looks, with all the rectangles and sharp edges. If the intent was to portray the emptiness of it, since Howl is moving or smth else, it's mostly alright as is. That being said, I'm happy to see your approach to the VN genre, I hope you'll get to enjoy and learn even more from it in the future, happy to see more of your stories and characters 😀